Lawrence
March 1, 2007, 01:32 PM
Hi Jason,
You have an interesting product that will do well.
If it were my product, I would want to tell the entire story in the first 5 seconds - which you can do with your product..
Your flyer has all the right components that just need to be switched a little.
I would change the headline to:
"Watch scratches vanish is seconds!
Then, have your before and after photos immediately under that one headline.
Remove the words "before" and "after" and replace with:
(photo on left) "Wipe it on" - in white text
(photo on right) "10 seconds later" - also in white text
Then the rest of the top text and balance of flyer copy under those photos.
Otherwise, it's a good flyer - in my opinion.
Lawrence
You have an interesting product that will do well.
If it were my product, I would want to tell the entire story in the first 5 seconds - which you can do with your product..
Your flyer has all the right components that just need to be switched a little.
I would change the headline to:
"Watch scratches vanish is seconds!
Then, have your before and after photos immediately under that one headline.
Remove the words "before" and "after" and replace with:
(photo on left) "Wipe it on" - in white text
(photo on right) "10 seconds later" - also in white text
Then the rest of the top text and balance of flyer copy under those photos.
Otherwise, it's a good flyer - in my opinion.
Lawrence
