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Todd August 31, 2007 12:34 AM

I'd like to know what you think...
 
OK, this started out as research for stories to share with my daughter to build self-confidence, became a source of self-motivation for me, and I began to write some things down with no idea what to do with them.

I want to share what I have so far. Maybe I should share it as an ebook, maybe I should keep it to myself (hopefully it's not that bad)... at one point I was hoping to expand and actually try to publish as a book - but I don't think it's quite up to that caliber, and most if it is already overdone in self-help type books anyway. So I've put it together with some simple graphics and want to see what kind of feedback I can get.

At any rate, it's been a source of motivation and encouragement for me, so here ya go: http://www.fearlessgraphics.com/Blue...or_Success.pdf

Sandi Bowman August 31, 2007 03:55 PM

Re: I'd like to know what you think...
 
Well, Todd, I read it all except the MLM stuff at the end and I liked most of it. The inspirational part is the best.

Some of the biblical quotes etc are a bit over done, IMHO and lose some of their effectiveness as a result. You kind of shifted gears rather abruptly from the inspirational to the biblical and it threw me momentarily. You might want to work on your transitions a bit.

Over all, your writing is pretty good but you will need an editor to help you with correct usage since there are some mis-used terms in the text.

The collage is interesting if one has read the pieces related to them but the last one (lower right corner) leaves one wondering what it's really about. Pretty well done otherwise.

Hope this helps.

Sandi Bowman


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