that should be ready tomorrow. If you want a sneak peek, follow the link below. But, remember, this is still preliminary... I don't have the team page ready and I don't have the order page ready.

But the rest of it will better explain exactly what I SHOULD be selling. I think you will be more impressed.

> Hi Steve:

Now, to your response...

> First, I wish you luck with your project. I
> took a careful look at your site and do
> offer a few perspectives from a unbiased
> surfer and fellow internet marketeer.

Thanks, that is all I ask. Even negative feedback is important.

> 1. My initial reaction was that I had to
> read your headline a few times for it to
> really sink in, and did not really hit any
> hot buttons for me. The words may be to
> sophisticated for some people (dummies like
> me) to understand.

I've changed it. I am sure a few hot buttons will now be hit. I know, I have to write for a 6th grade education. As I said, it was supposed to be a Q&D site, nothing more.

> 2. I think your body copy is great, tell me
> more! Your package is $147.00 and $500.00
> Its going to take me more than a few
> paragraphs to get out my credit card. I
> think defining what you are actually selling
> in the headline might help.

I think you will be more impressed with the new copy... It is more friend to friend.

> 3. Who is your target market and are they
> going to know those internet heavy hitters
> you mention? If not, some description of
> EACH one would really help.

Target market is anyone willing to part with $147 or $500... No, seriously. The target market is people working at home or working part-time, on weekends, etc. that REALLY want to make some SERIOUS money through the Internet. And do it on a part-time basis.

> 4. Try to capture the traffic. Get them to
> give you their email address. Maybe offer
> some free info or a mini-course. This may
> not lead to the immediate sale, but if you
> are using per-click or per page viewed
> advertising, you may convert sales on the
> back-end. Or perhaps offer an alternate
> package. If you can, try adding a hyperlink
> in your homepage for this, or if you can,
> add a pop-up banner. Build up a email list
> and get them to know, like, love and buy
> from you.

Check out the new copy... As I said, two pages are still lacking. This is a site I coded from scratch, so it took longer to do and in the process, I put more thought into what I really wanted to say.

> Just a few ideas, I hope it doesn't seem
> negative.




The new copy...