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Old September 20, 2012, 11:44 AM
Fishman
 
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Default Re: Please critique this short video...

TW, Not sure if you have read it, but a great book to read- How To Get Your Point Across in 30 Seconds or Less by Milo O. Frank. Also, I would take out the third "thousands" in your talk. It seems redundant and almost like you had to put out the extra effort to say it. Hope this helps. Otherwise it wasn't bad but I had a hard time understanding what benefit I would get for sending you an email.

Fred
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