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Old October 19, 2008, 06:49 AM
Sandi Bowman
 
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Default Re: Good or Bad? I want to ask for a critique on this site.

Actually it's not bad at all. A few minor grammatical errors but I understand English is not your first language.

The one that made me wonder was the part about dominating your market and 'even if your competitors are in the same market'. It stands to reason that a competitor would be in the same market. Not sure exactly what you intended to say but it needs re-working, IMHO.

That's a nice picture of you but I'm wondering what that white ribbon (or whatever it is) is all about. You might explain it to prevent any mis-interpretation by those of us not familiar with it's significance. Just a brief line or two would do.

Hope this is helpful.

Sandi Bowman
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