Bill
March 31, 2011, 02:35 AM
It should be "you're" instead of your in the following part:
"your flooded with customers within hours."
Also, it looks like there is a space between bomb and bard, and there shouldn't be.
I’m getting ready to do a mailing to 1,000 restaurants & businesses in my town and I need to make sure I have everything ready. So please critique my flyer. I’m really trying to think of a better headline. So please help. http://textmarketingmachine.homestead.com/flyer.html
Thank You,
Jason Hatchett
"your flooded with customers within hours."
Also, it looks like there is a space between bomb and bard, and there shouldn't be.
I’m getting ready to do a mailing to 1,000 restaurants & businesses in my town and I need to make sure I have everything ready. So please critique my flyer. I’m really trying to think of a better headline. So please help. http://textmarketingmachine.homestead.com/flyer.html
Thank You,
Jason Hatchett
