I certainly won't make any more comments about golfers, but if I was one, I know what I'd want ...
 

Gordon,

... I'd want 20 or 30 or 40 or 50 tantalizing bullets of info-bits, pulled right from the tape.

And if I was writing the piece, I'd transcribe the tape and then act as a bullet-seeking missile, going through every line of copy, deleting all the fluff, and leaving only the meaty sentences or phrases, then re-formatting them in the form of "Guess what this is" bullets designed to make even a golfer who needs Viagra want your tape instead.

It's a lot of work. But it works.

Richard

Thank you Richard, Dead Doctors who Golf don't lie...
 

anymore about their score.

You have been most helpful. This is what happens when you try to do a 10 minute job...you get 10 minute results.

I'm embarrassed I even posted it that way.

But it did get some very good tips, so I guess that was worth my 10 minutes, I'll go to WORK on it for real now.

Gordon

And just a few more thoughts....
 

Hi Gordon!

Echoing a bit from Mike and Paul...my first thought was to move the "Do you have a golfer on your Holiday list?" to the place where the headline would normally be, like Mike I wondered about the headline. If I did have a Golfer on my list I would be immediately interested....

Also, like Paul, I was thrown by the TARP coming out of the blue, I was not sure what that meant. I almost felt like saying, "This method" or something generic would be more effective if you did not want to spell out the title again.

Silly me, I even thought you must have a son named Jay! Maybe you do? Maybe I am simply confused as it is a Friday afternoon after a long week?

Have a restful weekend, I have truly valued the postings of all the Pictogrigms. I printed, and hand copied mine. Thank you so much!

With Purpose and Passion,

JULIE




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