Please critique this short video...

What I am most wondering about is the PACE. I was going after confident + deliberate, but I hope I didn't swerve into sleepy.

Also critique whatever other aspects you see fit to.

http://youtu.be/G25NxQczk44

Thanks!

-- TW

Originally Posted by -TW

What I am most wondering about is the PACE. I was going after confident + deliberate, but I hope I didn't swerve into sleepy.

Also critique whatever other aspects you see fit to.

http://youtu.be/G25NxQczk44

Thanks!

-- TW

It's 4 times as long as needed. At the 1:24 mark, I clicked away as you were saying how efficient you are, and I could see at least another minute to go.

Some minutes later I remember something about green but I have no idea what it is you want to say about green.

I liked your dying on the beach video better. It was a real video instead of a guy reading to me from the screen.

TW, Not sure if you have read it, but a great book to read- How To Get Your Point Across in 30 Seconds or Less by Milo O. Frank. Also, I would take out the third "thousands" in your talk. It seems redundant and almost like you had to put out the extra effort to say it. Hope this helps. Otherwise it wasn't bad but I had a hard time understanding what benefit I would get for sending you an email.

Fred

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