Constructive Criticism for My Flyer

Originally Posted by SteveSki

Hi Jason, Congratulations on your well deserved success!
You and your wife are both real doers. As you know good
ideas are a dime a dozen but the man or women who acts
on them is priceless!

I too would test different headlines until I maximized results.

A quick suggestion....

MAKE YOUR CAR LOOK BRAND NEW!
We Remove Dents, Dings, Scratches & Repair
Windscreen Chips and Cracks!

TODAY ONLY - FREE DEMO ON YOUR CAR FOR THE FIRST 3 CALLERS

Maybe also incorporate Don's Idea of using a Voice Mail Box with a 24 Hour Recorded Message and a Free Report!

Cheers,
Steve Shulenski
www.MoneyMakingPhotography.com

That would be great Steve except that he is looking for more dealer accounts.

The idea of using the voice box is a good bit, however in a competitive (buyers) market, you don't want them to have to jump through more hoops than they need to.
When I was detailing vehicles, I would just goto the dealer and offer my service.
The key was offer something that the others did not, which varied from simply beng punctual to also cleaning their restrooms ( another service that I ran at the time.

Jason it seems that you have other services to offer the dealership.
I really would simply send them a card with a date and time that YOU WILL BE THERE and then be there.
Simply being there on time would win you many accounts if you were in my area.
Jason