Please critique this E-mail copy.

Hello guy's.
I need to improve the following confirmation e-mail that will be sent out after 5-6 days of the customer purchase from a computer reselling company like PCMALL.com, cdw.com

Please help me improve it. My main concern is the text.

Thank you.

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Hello (name)

Thank you for your recent order with (company name)

I wanted to check with you that you are pleased with your purchase and that your item was received.

We at (Company name) hope you enjoy your purchase.

Hope to see you soon as we value you as our customer.

Make sure you sign up to our newslist to receive special deals every 3 weeks.
You can sign up to the list here (URL address).

Thank you.
(company name)
(Address)
(URL)