Letter Crititque For Deck Restoration Business

Ok Ok it's stinko don ?

It's the first letter, thats why I posted it
here to get some feedback from some pros.

I will go back and rewrite it again or use
a post card, with the idea of first getting
leads and then closeing.

Gary,

> ...you could send out 100,000 of "your
> letter" and get zilch response!

> You could modify "your letter" and
> correct spelling or whatever...send out
> 100,000 of "these" every month and
> still get NADA!

> WHY?

> Because there are so many things wrong with
> it it doesn't stand a chance to even get
> looked at, let alone read!

> There's only 2 ways "you" will do
> anything "trying to sell
> something";
> 1) Spend
> HOURS....days...weeks....months...years...learning
> HOW to "sell and market" a product
> or service
> 2) Hire someone who has already done it!

> Your "letter" is the reason why
> people PAY someone for their knowledge!...to
> SAVE THE TIME and AGGRAVATION!

> I now get 8 to 12 jobs a week with a
> POSTCARD with TWO SENTENCES on it!

> Call 800-289-6224 if you are
> "serious" about "making some
> GOOD money" in the Deck Renewal biz.

> Don Alm